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What It Means To Be Scene by ~LilMiss-FallOut:iconLilMiss-FallOut:



        Christy, you think Scene is nothing.
                              You think it's just about,
                                   the hair
                                    the clothes
                         and the cuts in our skin

                                            Well,
                           let me tell you it's more than that.
                    It's about cutting your hair just right,
                               so that it falls over our eyes,
                              and gives us a fake sense
                                     of a personality.
                             It's about going to the right shows,
                                             getting wasted,
                        and bribing the guitarist to take you home,
                            for a night of pleasure and games.
                              it's about wearing just enough clothes,
                                         to cover up your dignity
                                           and to try and play
                                                    hard to get.
                                       Being scene is about
                        slitting your wrists lightly enough
                                           to leave a scar
                            with no blood or pain involved.
©2008-2009 ~LilMiss-FallOut
:iconlilmiss-fallout:

Author's Comments

Written originally on June 3.
Well, here it is..my FIRST deviation! 8D :icondancingcatplz:
Weeeeeeeeeeell, about this....BEFORE you comment, WHINING and COMPLAINING about how I 'don't know Scene', I must say...I really don't know what Scene is. :bucktooth: I just REALLY wanted to write something like this, and 'Scene' sounded/looked good with it, so...Yeah. :iconimhappyplz:
Wrote this while listening to Fall Out Boy's 'Take This To Your Grave' and The Doors on repeat. Comments, favs, and critiques are EXTREMELY appreciated (especially the critiques!)
(Note: If you ACTUALLY critique this and give me advice, I shall love you FOREVER!!!!! :heart::heart::heart:)

:iconflowerdanceplz::iconimhappyplz::iconurhappyplz:

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:icongoldenbullets:
I really don't have a comment besides that this is awesome! :U You have great word choice, and great way to set tup the poem. :D faved.

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you only like them [ Cap'n Jazz ] because that hawt guy at the record store does, lol. - Nathaniel.
:iconlilmiss-fallout:
D'awwwwww...Thank you!!!!!!!!!!1 :iconlarryplz: :heart: :bucktooth:

B-but...are you SURE you don't a have atleast ONE critique??? Not atleast ONEEEEEEEEEE???? :iconimsorryplz:

(Oh, and thanks for the compliment on the set up, I liked it too when I wrote this! :iconminilarryplz:)

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"Your logic does not resemble our Earth logic."
:icontategami:
My only critique is that scene is stupid, but you capture that sense quite well yourself. I like the sense of seeing this through someone else's eyes, since I usually find most sub-cultures abhorrent. A great visual work, and great word choice.

Not much wrong with it, but nothing to obsess over.

It makes me feel that I am scene.
:iconlilmiss-fallout:
Thank you! :heart:
I find the whole Scene/Emo thing to be quite stupid, and this wasn't even a vent.
I just wanted to write something like this and 'scene' flowed well with it XD
Also, I like toying with persectives, it's fun :heart:
Heh, I doubt it! :D

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"Your logic does not resemble our Earth logic."
:icontenten-10:
XD YOU AND YOUR SISTER ARE AWESOME AT THIS STUFF, iloveyougais XD

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I strongly believe in GOD and his ways and that will NEVER change
:heart:GOD:heart:

I AM A BANANA :D
:iconlilmiss-fallout:
THANKYOU! XD That is SUCH a compliment, I wish to be just as good as HERRR! :heart: iluvyoutoo <3

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"Your logic does not resemble our Earth logic."
:icontenten-10:
XDDD your welcome C:

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I strongly believe in GOD and his ways and that will NEVER change
:heart:GOD:heart:

I AM A BANANA :D
:iconlilmiss-fallout:
c: Thankyou~!!!

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"Your logic does not resemble our Earth logic."
:icondittodragon:
I like the way (okay, obvious point yes :D ) you expand upon the first 5 lines during the rest of the poem which makes me think of the social group you are mocking:D hence I think its effective. There are some moments that were slightly more bitter and mocking than the rest. I liked that.

One thing. I think that experimenting with fonts is interesting... but you could easily achieve a far more striking effect using subtler language. Of course it could well have been the point but yeah :D anyway I enjoyed that :)

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I'm not gay but my boyfriend is :P

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